https://youtu.be/oLrF4SAFR7Y
The feedback that I got from my previous pitch was that it was good that I decided to use more inflections and a script. This time I kept these inflections and I also used a script. I did change the order in which I was presenting my pitch. Looking back some of the things I was saying didn't make since at the time I was saying them. I also added a few more fact to really stress the time saving qualities that my restaurant would provide. I also added a little bit more about why I would be fit to provide this service.
Hey Nala,
ReplyDeleteI've watched two of your elevator pitches and since the last one I think you have improved tremendously, your idea is more clear and you work well to change whatever you need to based on the feedback that you get. I think the script made you less nervous because you're not doing it on the fly and struggling to remember everything.
Hi Nala!
ReplyDeleteHaving gone back and reviewed your elevator pitches after watching this version, I feel that your improvements are definitely visible. A script is something that I felt helped me a lot, as it was much easier to keep the ideas I wanted to convey in order, and if written correctly, allowed me to be flexible with my wording and inflections to sound more natural as I delivered my pitch, something which I feel might be able to help you if you had to work on another revision of your pitch. You sounded very confident, and I felt that you going out of your way to stress the benefits that your product provides for your customer really helped your pitch stand out.
Thanks so much for sharing!